100 Word Challenge Week 12
It’s the afternoon and I was hungry. I walked into the
kitchen to make a sandwich. After I went down stairs to play a game but the
battery in the controller was dead so then I went back upstairs to get a white
piece of bread to eat. The next hour I was so energetic my parents told me to
slow down but I didn’t. A week after that we all hurried out the door because
we would be late for a flight but we made it we were going to pairs for two
weeks. First week there we played in the pool.
Try not to switch from past tense to present tense in the middle of a sentence.
ReplyDeleteTry not to repeat words like "I".
I like how you added a tiny problem.